cling tight to that last
breathe deep of the
final breath
upon your skin
into your

watch her walk away
memorize her
movements —

sway of hip,
swish of hair,
steel of resolve —

and when the murmur
of molten
torment your mind

remember what
have done



Filed under Poetry, Poetry - Prompts

17 responses to “Regret

  1. “when the murmur
    of molten
    torment your mind”

    Both the alliteration and the sentiment here are stunning, Mark.

  2. The torment of poor choices here, I suspect. Perhaps forgiveness will come??? Really nice prose here.

  3. remember what you have done, wow condemnation. brilliantly written.

  4. I agree with ‘whimsygizmo’ – the alliteration was so powerful within the context of your prose….Felt like a kiss goodbye….Nice

  5. Sometimes the pain of what we have done takes such a long time to get through. We have to learn to forgive ourselves and, sometimes it’s not easy at all.
    Very sad, very vivid, very lovely.

  6. The perfect revenge poem. Maybe he’ll think twice before he does whatever he did again.

  7. Sadly the loss of grace destroys a relationship and it is never really ever the same again.Part of the human condition I’m afraid. Well expressed and though provoking.

  8. Hmm…can I borrow this!? 😉

    Excellent, Mark. Voice. Word choice. Structure. Flow. Beautifully done.

  9. She was lovely, a shame that it took a certain turn to know it. Yes, sometimes the price to pay is simply the memory. I love how the poem falls like his heart.

  10. OK, perhaps he shouldn’t have but the plan now is to keep mum!

  11. Lovely! You summed-up that last moment so well. I could see her walking away.

  12. unfetteredbs

    wow! enough said..

  13. Poignant and gripping.

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